WALT: Write Poetic Writing
The Fern
In the bush is where I grow where green and brown colours swallow the mush
In the bush I am the size as a ruby ball
which means I’m quite small
In the bush with rough and delicate leaves I shall rip quite easily
In the bush I am a curvy triangle, like the leaves, the flax and sometimes the trees
While I blow in the breeze and the bush talks, Fweesh, shhh, Fwesh
my fury stalk extends, I may not have many jobs,
But I love to represent New Zealand with each leaf I grow
Hi my name is Connor from Paparoa Range School I like the way you put the nz bush into words I like the way you describe the bush you told us about the colors it was great reading next time you could use some more popular words thanks for reading connor.
ReplyDeleteHi Jess, I love the way you have crafted your visual image with words like delicate, furry stalk extends, and colours swallow the mush! You have definitely thought about your purpose for writing and shaping your ideas with effect. Miss J
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback conner
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica, love the Poem. My Favourite line is... I may not have many jobs, but I love to represent New Zealand. I Also love the Picture that you have put up. Maybe Next time you could use the 5 senses or something. -Hunta :)
ReplyDeleteHi Hunta
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting on my blog. I might use the 5 senses next time. Jess:)
Thanks Miss J
ReplyDeleteHi Safiyya from Gilberthorpe School.
ReplyDeleteThis is an amazing poem in my head I could make out the image.
What's you favorite part of the poem.
Bye!
Hi Safiyya!
ReplyDeleteI think my favourite bit is . . . I may not have many jobs,
But I love to represent New Zealand with each leaf I grow
Bye!